the asylum of trees
by Irene
What shaped me, in the first world
when everything was spruce,
pristine like a morning star.
But I wasn’t the apple of
an indulgent cat’s eye,
and she’d strap me to a chair
with a small reproachful look,
blindfolded the sun as if
the world was a compound of dirt-coated sores,
how she secretly foul-mouthed, a sweet-talking
martyr, snuffing shame into honor,
how she inhaled & spat laughter,
balancing the bell jar.
That world was restless, shifting sadness
into ghosts, seeping like a coma,
running in steep shadows cast
on blanketed ground,
& pasted eyelids bizarrely
shut, caught in the drift
of the whistling trees.
I could hardly explain the souls
nestled in the woody labyrinth,
scorched by a latex knife
smudgy with thick glaze,
& purged of any knowing.
Image via Reena
Process notes: Here’s a poem I wrote channelling into a dark brain. Defy me if your brain is full of lavendar. The trees are there alright, but hardly an ode to a tree, as Neil Reid of We Write Poems would have us write this week. It’s probably the wintry trees that suggested such a mental landscape, provided by Brian Miller of D’Verse Poets Pub. The words came via Brenda Warren of The Sunday Whirl. And yea I just finished reading The Bell Jar. That probably explains it. Don’t you, like me, feel the need for illumination?


Irene- very impressive integration of the three prompts. My dVerse is on my wordpress blog, but the Sunday Whirl on my blogger blog.
Yup a three-in-one, because I’m also lazy. *kidding*
nice….wow this has some grit and texture to it…i like that…ha on finishing the bell jar as well…i can see hints…smiles….love the voice you use in this…its a strong piece…and i like it much…
Thanks Brian, for putting the image into my head.
A disturbing poem, well wordled, as I hadn’t noticed the wordle words until I read your process notes. I am interested in your approach to that picture, which was my second choice for the dVerse prompt.
I like images prompt, Viv, because it seems to draw out something from you.
goodness..this is a gritty write for sure…esp. the last stanza gave me goose bumps..very well executed… a bit a different voice for you but def. enjoyed
Thanks Claudia, so glad that the last stanza did.
Sad and strong imagery….liked the work of your deep dark brain.
It didn’t really feel deep & dark when I was writing it. But I guess it is. We need to go to deep & dark places. Most people wouldn’t want to go there at all, unless forced to. But that’s what writers are for, to go where angels fear to tread.
A different and dark view on this woody labyrinth (we used the same picture)…
Very visual but chilling specially the last lines ~ enjoyed this ~
Thanks Grace.
Definitely a dark write, Irene, but the wordle seems to be steering us that way this week. Well done.
Traci, you’re right, the words steer us into the dark. So choosing words is terribly important.
Deliciously,disturbingly dark as a poem of ghosts and not knowing might be – terrific integration – thanks for including the photo – The poem called me back two three times to read again and again -
Thanks Pearl!
I enjoyed this very much. I recently read Sylvia’s collection poems and her journals (which I highly recommend; they far surpass her poetry).
These lines are my favorites:
“What shaped me, in the first world
when everything was spruce”
“blindfolded the sun as if
the world was a compound of dirt-coated sores,
how she secretly foul-mouthed, a sweet-talking
martyr”
“scorched by a latex knife”
“purged of any knowing”
Hi Shawna, I haven’t read her journals. And think I will. The Bell Jar didn’t really explain why she wanted to kill herself, I felt, and I made up the whole 2nd stanza.
I love coming here, Irene! Your words are always amazing. You have created some spectacular images again this week! Your first stanza is gorgeous: “What shaped me, in the first world when everything was spruce, pristine like a morning star.” And then,” But I wasn’t the apple of an indulgent cat’s eye, and she’d strap me to a chair with a small reproachful look.” It just gets better and better! You truly have a talent for this.
Maybe the lines just dropped on my lap like a star, Marianne. *twinkle*
As in all things, there needs an equal balance of dark and light. This has it all, finely tuned in a wonderful weave of words.
Fantastic, Irene. Dark yes, but you have woven the words perfectly.
Pamela
Cheers for you Pamela, for keep coming round to my work.
As always, I find poetry simply alluring and wonderful. You take surrealism a bit above its usual functional use and manage it in your words with lethal dosages, perhaps asking us to reconsider taking the blue pill in the desert of the real. Your work is filled with excellent lines, so to pick a few seems unfair, but the following were especially meangful at this time, in this place in the matrix:
blindfolded the sun as if
the world was a compound of dirt-coated sores,
how she secretly foul-mouthed, a sweet-talking
martyr, snuffing shame into honor,
how she inhaled & spat laughter,
balancing the bell jar.
I think the poem is as much about Sylvia as it is about your resonance of her words in your own bell jar. These words wrap into so many different variations such divergent aspects of reality that I learned from her as a younger poet wannabe. Your ability to do so makes me admire your poem that much more. Excellent write.
Honestly there’re bits of myself in there, but it’s so mixed up in something else that it isn’t me anymore. Thank you so much for your well-considered response. Much appreciated.
Explore the dark fantastic, Irene! The first stanza is brilliant and beautiful. And then we plunge into serious despair. It made me read it three times. I feel heavy, but abuse myself with more reading. ha!
When I was small, I used to have this experience of the trees, dreaming, and then not being able to open my eyes no matter how I tried. I travelled to that dream. It wasn’t despair, it almost felt like “before I was born”. Your words, Brenda, also helped birth this. Pat yourself every week, girl.
that last stanza was just amazing writing
private dreamliner
Thanks Zongrik.
I love your poem. Knew it for Sylvia Plath. The Bell Jar is on my Amazon.com wish list. I think I read it in college but no longer remember. Sometimes I talk aloud to myself to keep from going mad. I remind myself I am okay.
The narrative voice of the young girl who wanted to kill herself didn’t sit very well with me, I must confess, Cheryl. Born that way? But I get a glimpse of her scary unmaternal poems.
I absolutely love the title. There is something compelling about it which keeps it at the forefront of my mind long after reading the poem.
margo
Thanks Margo, it came in a flash of madness.
We should all have such flashes, Irene!
Yes, zap me with a flash! Gosh I’m so beat, there won’t be any zaps for the moment.
Don’t know what I can say that hasn’t already been said above, but: there are splendid images and thoughts in here, very dreamlike and meditative. There is indeed an unsettling note, sort of Inferno-ish and purgatorial, but also rich with invention.
Thanks much Joseph. Loosely based on a dream & a book. I wonder, isn’t creativity a kind of madness? Falling in love? Any kind of obsession? We’re all in degrees of madness then.
Love it! with interesting images.
Thank you Cathy, have a great day!
I enjoy reading other Wordlers – and now I am intrigued by the other two prompt places. I may never do housework again… (just kidding) I just want to write all day. Thank you, Irene. Forgive my lavender brain… some days are just lighter than others ~J
You re so funny (*the housework bit*) you made my day. And hell, it’s gonna be a long day. There’re prompt sides a plenty. Time is limited. As such it’s difficult to keep up with the commenting. That’s a perpetual dilemma for me. It’s good to meet your lavendar brain.
what i nice read Irene….thanks for this
This is probably one of the more dark and surreal one of yours that I’ve read. I caught the reference to “The Bell Jar”.
After reading this, I get a sense of being trapped in a confusing, dark place and not knowing where to go, and then being restrained and tormented. There is someone in my past who reminds me of the person you reference in the second stanza…she never got over her own problems, so she took out her anger and hurt on everyone else.
-Nicole
There’s so much going on in that second stanza. I’m intrigued and a little scared of that “sweet-talking / martyr, snuffing shame into honor”.
Richard
Does it remind you of puritanical types?
Nice avatar photo, Richard, and so good to see you.